本人即将上初三 练练writing skills下面是我的文章The life I likeI always dream about the future. They are not only beautiful but attractive as well.When I was a young boy, I just knew playing all day. I don’t know what is evil and what is good.After some years, I become a pupil in a primary school. It was an ordinary one. I learn some basal knowledge and spent the time.At my 4th grade, it was 2001; I received a computer as a present. Although my family isn’t very rich, but I can still surf the internet once or twice a week. I didn’t know internet a lot, I just think internet is a place for fun. I had a good time at that time. A year later, I became older and knew more knowledge. Maybe I really knew how strange it was. Of course I started to learn how to use it more.After I graduated from the primary school, I know some IT companies like Microsoft, Kingsoft, and Google and so on. And then I know these sorts of companies can make a lot of money by the newest technology.A few months later, I knew the way to programs. It is very hard to develop computer programs.It needed some tools called visual basic, visual c++ and Delphi and so on.Now I am a grade 9 student and I know more than before. My dream is that one day I could become a computer programmer and could go to Microsoft, which is the largest software company in the world. Then I will be developing Windows and Office.I also want to go abroad someday because I want to open up my eyes to see the world. In the life, I don’t think everyone must be the best, but everyone must enjoy his life. If he can’t do this simple thing, the basic meaning of the life will be lost.
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Great!
热心网友
1：第一行:not only 和but also连的吧。 2：第三段After some years,I become的become应改为became吧;I learn 的learn 改为learnt.3:第五段时态大部分错误；And then ...companies can make ...中companies 和can中间要加关联词which 或that。本人才疏学浅暂且找到这些，不过还有多处不通。
热心网友
注意时态，你的时态用的好混乱，改都改不过来了！
热心网友
你即将上初三啊?厉害厉害,真佩服!!我都要上初四了,感觉没你写的好!甘拜下风!