大家提题意见: ,myfatheropenedastorewhichsellsbedquilt.WhileIcomebackhomefromschool,myfatheralwaysworkinthestore.WhenIcometohelphim,heoftensaystome,"Dostudyyourself,elseIdo."WhenIgotosleep,myfatherstillworkinthestore.Atthattime,Ithink,Imustsudymuchharderandharder.
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My father is industrious。 He is aready fifty-six years old。When I was young ,my father opened a store which sells bedquilt。While I come back home from school , my father always work in the store。When I come to help him , he often says to me , " Do study yourself , else I do 。"When I go to sleep , my father still work in the store。 At that time ,I think,I must sudy much harder and harder。 ***********以下的修改供你参考：My father is industrious although he's already fifty-six years old。 When I was a child, my father opened a store selling bedquilts(不能只卖一床吧？）While I came back from school, I always saw him busy with work。 When I went to give him a hand, he said," Go and study, and just leave other things to me。"He was always busy working in the store till I fell asleep。 From then on, I've made up my mind to study harder and harder。不要连续使用过多的短句，而要错落有致。另外还有语法错误。。